I returned to an unnamed short story and was pleased. The ending needs a little work but it could be ready for a beta read soon.
The story Melina Unbound has everything I want for it except the main character’s voice feels incomplete. She needs innocent anger with fear, wonder, and joy as related by one who has suffered innocent anger. I’m also going to try a version of it in present tense. That might reveal the voice I’m looking for and give the story the right tone.
Both stories are close but need refining; it’s always finding the last best words that takes me the longest.
Kevin J. Fellows 